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End of The World (PLEASE COMMENT -_-)
written by cryptic_misery10:23 PM 1/31/05The skies around us
Show nothing real
But an outer layer of forever
That we can never feel
The ground below us
Holds us against our will
Held down by gravity
Trying to break free still
The mountains surrounding us
Is a goal for us to reach
But once we get to the top
There are no more boundaries left to breach
The stars up above us
Are nothing but a false wishing light
Depending on a shimmer of ultra violets
To make our whole live's right
The souls burried inside us
Are the only friend's so deep
That will truly last forever
One that we will always keep
The hearts locked within us
Stay chained down, no love to send
Once every person's heart breaks
The world has reached an end... |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by I_heart_jack_black (1-31-2005 - 10:30 PM)
| I liked it! (hello Kerri!) but my ONLY thing (cus it was very kewl!) is ur syllabyle count. (i probably didn't spell dat right) but, gr8 job at keeping the lines fresh, and new. It was very good. +) (cyclops smiley) |
by dark_child07 (1-31-2005 - 10:45 PM)
| I loved it!!!!! You wrote it very well. I like to write poems too, if you ever want to exchange poems or anything like that or just wanna chat.....amail me at yellowpr07@aol.com |
by (guest) (3-10-2005 - 04:48 PM)
| Wow,that's a very beautifull poem.A little bit sad,but beautifull.!!! Greetzzz tessa
msn: maraureamane@hotmail.com |
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