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written by lost_cause09:29 PM 2/9/05As I lay here in my mind
Spinning round and round
I'm listening closly
But I don't here a sound
I'm trying hard to see
What shouldn't be seen
I can't seem to see it
Failure isn't comforting
I want more than I can have
And more than they can give
But I fear if I don't get it
I might not be able to live |
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I don't like it... I really don't like it... Why can't I write somthing good?? [ View lost_cause's Profile ] [ Go to the Poetry Portal ] This Poem has been viewed 396 times The Poem Author has disabled comments by non-members
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» Comments / Feedback | by not-for-real (2-9-2005 - 09:34 PM)
I think you do can right something good. I enjoyed your 'trying' poem and this one is full of emotion as well. And a poem isn't good untill it says something |
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