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im dead...(plz comment)
written by darkness_follows_me03:19 PM 4/1/05I'm dead to all the living.
I live amongst the dead.
Two months since my funeral,
and I've escaped from my death bed.
No one understands.
I'm still alive today.
i hear voices outside my coffin.
I hear crying outside my coffin.
I was dying outside my coffin Two months ago today.
Mother cries,
father sighs,
but I know they never cared.
For they were never part of my life.
No they were never there.
I fall in love with darkness.
I fall in love with the dead.
Two months since my funeral,
and I've escaped from my death bed |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Scythe42 (4-1-2005 - 03:23 PM)
| wow,that was really awsome. Especially the rhyme-sceme and the rythym. |
by (guest) (4-1-2005 - 03:31 PM)
| i personally didn't like this poem you used dead and death alot |
by punkchick135 (4-1-2005 - 04:41 PM)
| it's a good poem but in the second pherse-or w/e-maybe you could substitute coffin with caket or something at least once because you use coffin a little too m,uch but all n all it was agood poem |
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