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Escape from me
written by cryptic_misery01:58 AM 8/20/04Whirlwind of black clouds
Rain of fire surrounds
Release your souls, he has arrived
Give up your hearts, they are deprived
I'm stuck looking down
I cannot help but frown
There's no escape from me
Why does this have to be?
I'm the roseless thorned
All the people I love have scorned
Blood, shiver, and steam
I live in this invisible dream |
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» Comments / Feedback | by run_with_knives077 (8-20-2004 - 02:30 AM)
It was a bit dissapointing, for me, I think the rhyming was a bit distracting from the meaning at first. Otherwise, i found it nice. |
by Shyla (8-21-2004 - 04:24 AM)
On the contrary, I like the rhyming.
Either way, It's a great poem.
Shy |
by Livy Shurtleff (8-25-2004 - 02:51 PM)
from reading most of your poerty, we seem to write about similar subjects, and i find that rather cool. its nice to know your not alone when it comes to your thoughts. i think i like thid poem more then others. and dont worry about the rhyming ;-) i like it. i rhyme here and there in my writing. but enought about me. i really like this poem. i look forward to reading more of your writing. |
by Livy Shurtleff (8-25-2004 - 02:52 PM)
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