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surrounded but alone
written by bloodyfairy08:54 PM 9/29/04i'm surrounded by people
but i still feel so alone
i scream at the top of my lungs
no one hears
fake smiles come at me
but nothing is real
because they don't care how i feel |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by yomamma (9-29-2004 - 09:58 PM)
| very short like your other poem i just read, but this one is pretty good 2, maybe you should add some things 2 your poetry to make it feel like the people reading it are acutally there, thats what i do with mine, very descriptive |
by justfuckoff (9-30-2004 - 04:13 AM)
| This is a really good poem. I am glad that I am not the only one who feels invisible to the world. |
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