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bicardi......
written by bloodlyvalentine05:55 PM 11/3/04she said
ill give you bicardi
when you can spell it
bitch
i punched her up the nose
who the fuck do you think your calling bitch
the motherfucking hoe
she chucked me out
but i came back
with a few of my friends
and a shot gun
blasted the whore
right up to heaven
and all the rest of them
drained the whole bar
fucking dry
and went to bed with her stripper
came back the next morning
with a fucking hangover
and no memory of what had happened
went into the bar
asked for bicardi
they told me i should die
what the fuck thats sposed to mean
so i drained him fucking dry |
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THIS POEM IS POINTLESS BUT IM BORED!
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Trapezium (11-3-2004 - 06:48 PM)
| What the fuck is this shit?! No emotion, no flow, and if you didn't remember things from the past night then how the fuck could you write about them, from memory!? Poems arew only good if they come from the heart, not if they're complete jibberish someone made up because they were bored. Poetry doesn't consume my boredom, or anyone else's I know, So why would it be any different for you? You just want a high poem count, most of us (kahno, Genocide Reaper, morbid_angel, SuperBob) worked our way up here through our hearts showing true talent. Other's (like you seem to be doing) haven't. |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-3-2004 - 08:43 PM)
| damn it deleted ur comment! post it again man!
and you right there, dont read my poetry if your just gonna get all worked up bout it, and whats your problem anyways? just coz im not posting that stuff that does come from the heart your getting all pissed off. well, im not posting that stuff coz that stuff wont get any replies, and that stuff that means something to me will sit on this site like a useless peice of shit and what is the fucking point in that. so i good stuff where it can be respected, now you can go fuck off and dont come back! |
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-6-2004 - 08:11 PM)
| KAHNO GET YOUR HEAD OUTA UR ASS.
this is a gud poem, if it aint your thing it dont mean its bad. You are a right wanka if you cant realise talet when you see it. She write better poems than any of your crap. I rememba a comment you posted on one of ny poems that said that I should let my poems come from the heart, well your fukin poem just came from ur fukin arse. So u can shut up, i you dont like her poems the bugger off, you bitch |
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-6-2004 - 08:12 PM)
| bloodlyvalentine, I love all your poems, except the ones bout me. lol. Kahno, gguess wat I hate all your poems cuz they all cum straight out of your arse, just like your coments. |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-7-2004 - 09:34 AM)
| caaaaaaalm down courtney! and khano is a man so hes cant be a bitch, hahahaha, *hands courtney some weeeed* |
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