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ember
written by Trapezium07:57 PM 11/3/04And I guess our short story had it's time,
You were more then just a freind,
We shared some happy memories,
Oh, well some good things must end.
The flame that brought us together,
Is now nothing more then an ember,
But I know I loved the times we had,
And The little things I'll remember.
I never saw you sad, but somehow,
You were distant and you drifted away,
A once perfect partner,
Looked around in dismay.
I saw all the roads but still took the wrong turn-in,
I never noticed the dead-end sign,
And then one night I thought to myself,
Were you ever mine?? |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Schizophrenic_broken (11-4-2004 - 08:28 PM)
| personally i dont like this poem, it doesnt flow very well |
by cryptic_misery (11-5-2004 - 03:14 PM)
| I like it kahno, absolutely. Because I understand all your poems, and I can become the character in each one. I love you buddy I hope you are doing ok, comment on one of myne and tell me what's up! =) ♥ |
by Trapezium (11-5-2004 - 03:47 PM)
| lol schizo, this is one of the best flowing poems I've written. Do you know anything about flow because your poems show a significant lack of it. Are you even schizophrenic? If you are, did you know that less then 1% of schizo's realise they are a schizo? |
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-6-2004 - 02:02 PM)
| I'm so sorry, ur highness. Hahaha, get ur head out ur arse, YOU BEST FLOWING POEM, ha, wots ur worst like then, bitch? |
by Trapezium (11-6-2004 - 05:37 PM)
| Why don't you take your head out of your arse and shut up with these idiosyncrisies? Sorry, I forgot, pathetic little babies don't know words like that. Learn to quote too, I never implied this was my best flowing poem, I told it was one of the best flowing poems I have written. Big difference. If you have a problem with me, don't take it out on my poetry. If you think my poems are shit, then give me constructive criticism. Don't lie and find something to put me down abotu. You obviously don't know what flow is. |
by bleeder (11-7-2004 - 12:04 AM)
| like i said TAKE A MOTHER FUCKING DRAG PEOPLE!!!!!!!!!! |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-7-2004 - 09:50 AM)
| *sits with bleeder and takes a motherfucking drag* you people are funny, carry on this is entertaining |
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