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what i am
written by bloodlyvalentine08:54 PM 11/5/04take my pride
my confidence
my soul away
and lay me bare for all to see
laugh at me
mock me
ruin me
and do whatever you will
use me
abuse me
acuse me
of your own filthy sins
take my voice
my heart
my love away
and leave me helpless within
my life
my heart
my everything
all been taken away
im just a show for you to throw
and then ill be useless again |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by (anonymous) (11-5-2004 - 09:06 PM)
| you're already pretty useless, let's face it. If you're abused and acused, at least you'll be helping someone out, instead of sitting there writing bad poetry. |
by Lost_In_Darkness (11-5-2004 - 09:09 PM)
| unlike the other commenter on this poem i love it i think its very well written and i can relate with alot of it....keep writing good poems like this;) |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-5-2004 - 09:16 PM)
| ahahahaahahahaha, well SOMEBODY doesnt ike me, but its ok, ur entitled to ur opinion *starts planning her/his death* |
by dacode05 (11-5-2004 - 10:30 PM)
| really enjoyed this...dont ever let anyone anonymous wig u out...this one shows the beginning of hard real strength..now slowly take it gurl |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-6-2004 - 07:20 AM)
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-6-2004 - 11:36 AM)
| i like it. so if ur anomus u dont av an accout because..... |
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-6-2004 - 11:37 AM)
| u cant write poems and get ur head out ya arse and go fuk urself |
by (anonymous) (11-6-2004 - 08:21 PM)
| This poem is very good, and I'm not easily pleased. (ANON...LEAVE UR NAME then speak your mind. At least she's being real. If you think something sucks, it might to you, but don't hide. This was to make that point. My name is just right above...) |
by bloodlyvalentine (11-7-2004 - 09:17 AM)
| lol, thanks anon, i aprritiate it |
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