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i stand alone
written by blood lily10:51 PM 11/5/04Here i stand alone, looking into your world
i was there once, but now i'm in the cold
i stand alone
take my hand, you see, i thought we could be....
but now, i'm in the dark
i stand alone
so stand beside me and don't deny me
i'll help you find the light.
i stand alone
so, take my hand, and stand with me.
stand with me.
i stand alone |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by (anonymous) (11-5-2004 - 11:24 PM)
| I think you should say "I stand alone" a few more times. Perhaps five. Perhaps seven. |
by xOBlaCkTeaRz_LP (11-6-2004 - 01:10 AM)
| its really good but just a tip you dont gotta do it just saying like in the last part say .....I stand alone Alone i stand and i feel tore...or I stand alone I stand Alone I miss My home ...just suggestion but I LOve Youre Poem Its Really Good |
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