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i see..
written by melons06:30 PM 11/9/04you see a rose when only a petal
you see a river when only a puddly
you see a word when only a letter
you see a heart when only a shattered one
i see blood when only a vein
i see a tear when only an eye
i see a future when only a past
i see friends when only a friend
i see...
i see...
i see you when there is only me |
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im not sure if this is good or not i think tha last bit doesent go but hey.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by thehorselover1063 (11-9-2004 - 06:33 PM)
| its good!
but the bit at the end well i dont get that bit but then again im hopeless |
by melons (11-9-2004 - 06:37 PM)
| i didnt think the bit at the end went eather .. |
by Schizophrenic_broken (11-9-2004 - 07:32 PM)
| its so good. Except the end. But work on it and it'll be great |
by Trapezium (11-9-2004 - 08:01 PM)
| I like it. The end bit doesn't go but I can understand it and still think it's rather good. |
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