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I am dead
written by Deadkittycat06:13 AM 11/15/04if your daughter was dead
what would you do then?
would you cry about her innocence?
or go silent and never speak of it?
I know my mother would crawl up the wall
my father would say nothing at all
my step brother would buy an 8 ball and smoke it all
my sisters morn ...they're my all
they'd all just let it fall |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Shyla (11-15-2004 - 07:00 AM)
| This is interesting, I like the way you have written it. The question at the start really leads you in well. However, changing the line about your brother could make this flow smoother. If that is what you want. |
by scarlet_tears666 (1-30-2005 - 07:08 AM)
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