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Shea
written by Deadkittycat06:25 AM 11/15/04do you want me?
I assume you like to look apon me
why not just tell me?
I'm dumb just spell it out for me
god I want you to tell me!
I know when you walk by me you smell me
kinda creepy...
you dispell sighs when you stare at me
glares make me feel bare and itchy
but stares make me feel beautiful and pretty
I love how when you want you can be so lippy
your eyes are so gripping
I cant help but feel it slipping
these tears start dripping... |
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» Comments / Feedback | by Shyla (11-15-2004 - 06:40 AM)
I know this isn't finished yet, but when you rework it, as I assume you are going to, you may want to look at the punctuation.The rhyming pattern you have developed is a little unusual, but wonderfully done nonetheless and I really like the last three lines. Good luck |
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