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Sex With You
written by darktinkerbell06:21 PM 12/11/04hold me close
body heat rising
kiss my lips, sensually
but firm, and loving
kiss my neck
lay me down slowly
look deeply in to my eyes
slip off my shirt,
slide off my pants.
kiss my body all over....
unhook my bra,
pull off my underwear,
kiss me once more
and pull me closer
hold me tight
slide on top of me
slide it in slowly
make me moan
louder and louder,
go a little faster
make me moan even louder
please me.....
anyway I want.....
still looking into my eyes,
loving me.....
until the night is done,
till tomorrow night
when you hold me close,
kiss me sensually and
we start all over again |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
first attempt at this kind of poem *blushes* please tell me what you think
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Trapezium (12-11-2004 - 06:31 PM)
| It's pretty good for a first try, next time I think you should have more foreplay. Describe the feelings, describe the actions. Give lots of details to increase the intensity. |
by endless_suffering (12-11-2004 - 07:13 PM)
| I agree.. It is good for your first try. Hey I couldn't do better so...good job. |
by (anonymous) (12-12-2004 - 12:36 AM)
| that poem was krazy. i liked it. i'll try it k?
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by IceBound (12-14-2004 - 05:16 PM)
| damn girl if you want it that bad... you know who to call! |
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