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I wanna hold you down
written by .purity.01:22 PM 12/18/04Iwanna hold you down
I wanna drown out the sound of your screaming (in pain)
I wanna see you build up the hate
I wanna see you try to relate to the feeling (in vain)
I quiver in disgust to see you're still alive agian
Another way, another day, to me it's all the same
I look out from the corner to see you so sedate
I Bite my lip and dream of plans to smash your pretty facei |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
a chorous from my song.. damn.. i can't spell...
umm.. well, enjoy... (or at least try to) please leave me advise coz i need it
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| » Comments / Feedback | by blackened_rose (12-18-2004 - 05:19 PM)
| I think that it's pretty good. Just need to reword some of it, the rythmic structure is alittle long in some spots. But other then that I like it :) ~Kath |
by .purity. (12-21-2004 - 06:46 PM)
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