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WORKS BEST WHEN IT'S BROKEN (CMNTS PLZ)
written by MintyFreshGirl09:56 AM 1/29/05IT WORKS BEST WHEN IT'S BROKEN
* This heart of mine,
it works best when it's broken
it pumps the red life-syrup
through slits for skin to soak in
This voice of mine, *
it works when I'm not choking
on salt and blood and bitterness
of words I haven't spoken
* This mind of mine,
it works best when it's open
un-hinging in the darkness
of the secrets it's been cloaked in
This soul of mine, *
it works just like a token
trade it in for some cheap prize
before its worth has soaked in
* These dreams of mine,
these dreams remain unbroken
but I'm still waiting for the day
when I will be awoken. * |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
This poem feels better if read out loud
COMMENTS WOULD BE VERY NICE! (they don't even have to be good comments, just honest.)
~Thanks a bushel for reading it ~
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| » Comments / Feedback | by endless_suffering (1-29-2005 - 10:23 AM)
| it's ok... I mean I don't do better or nutin.. it's good |
by lilrocsychic (1-29-2005 - 12:56 PM)
| it has a nice flow... and you're right, it sounds better when you say it out |
by TearsOfBetrayal (1-29-2005 - 04:28 PM)
| I thought it was very well done. I can't write to save my life, so I idolize people who can...... like u |
by boom_boom13 (1-29-2005 - 10:33 PM)
| I like the dream, mind, heart, and sould stuff. good job! |
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