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Lovely Day To Lose Your Hopes (comment)
written by First2Last11:34 PM 2/5/05everyday a new life is born
and everyday there's a person's death
and people get depressed and morn
and people get scared or short of breath
every night a child cries
and a mother fails to be a mom
one slits their wrists in hopes to die
and wont ever get along
every breath will fill their lungs
and every tear will rinse their eyes
and in their hearts a song is sung
and no one will no why
every day a life is born
while two lives are being torn
because every night a dream is shattered
and a hope has become lost
and an empty room is filled with chatter
and something special becomes tossed
because everyday emotions rise and fall
and as karma comes and goes
a person's name is called
by a person they dont know
and every ache starts in their hearts
and every swell is in their brains
while two lives are being torn apart
four others do the same
becuase everyday a life is born
while two lives are being torn |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
this was an english assignment during the shakespear unit last year when we had to write an Elizabethan Sonnet and i got in trouble for Doubling the structure. tell me what you think please.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by HdHype (2-5-2005 - 11:36 PM)
| im speachless. i really can't think of any thing to say. there is to much to say. |
by admiTTed_struGgl3 (2-6-2005 - 12:18 AM)
| Thats really good. Im seriously at a loss of words. |
by Marigold (2-6-2005 - 12:27 AM)
by emo_tears (2-6-2005 - 01:21 AM)
| perfect, udderly terrific |
by I_Hate_Your_Eyes (2-20-2005 - 02:06 AM)
| wow.... that is an amazing poem. |
by I_Hate_Your_Eyes (2-20-2005 - 02:13 AM)
| wow.... that is an amazing poem. |
by fallen_&_lost_angel (3-9-2005 - 01:39 AM)
| IT'S REALLY GOOD EVEN THOUGH YOU DID DOUBLE THE STRUCTURE |
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