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Past 1 (comment pls)
written by WildCatHD02:03 AM 2/10/05I'll never stop I'll just move on
There's love inside but fuck it
Cuz I remain alone
Two hour conversations
Exchange feelings over phones
I?ve been built up, to let down
Fold like paper under pressure
Trying to find her hidden treasure
Express my feelings down on paper
Never give her the notes or the poems
But you write them
Secret admirer no, cuz she knows that you like her
You leave them in a hidden place
But when you get older, then you'll wonder
Maybe if I'd |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by xwhatitis2burn8x (2-10-2005 - 04:01 AM)
| i like it, my only critique would be that the ending is kind of rushed. it just seems like you rushed it a lil and so its still kinda unfinished. but other than that great job |
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