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Alone
written by -.SilentTears.-08:04 PM 2/12/05I sit in my room
Alone. And cry b'cause you
Don't know how I feel. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
I don't really like this poem that much..but it came to me in like 2 min. It's bascially just saying that I am consantly sitting in my room crying about my ex. I love him more than ever, but he doesn't understand, nor does he care. {leave comments please}
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| » Comments / Feedback | by lilfukedupdragonlover (2-12-2005 - 08:17 PM)
| ya i know how u feel. in the end ihope he realizes everythinfg |
by -.SilentTears.- (2-12-2005 - 08:21 PM)
by Adder (2-12-2005 - 11:08 PM)
| I think you have 8 sylables in the second line:
"a-lone - And - cry - be-cause - of - you"
That means it's one sylable too long for a haiku line.
Unfortunitly, I can't see an easy way to remove one. It's still a good poem |
by (guest) (2-19-2005 - 06:04 AM)
by AthiestAnarchist (2-26-2005 - 02:00 AM)
by Evilmonkeysdance (3-24-2005 - 04:21 AM)
| I GET IT!! I HATE THAT FEELING
but i dont like the poem, im sorry, can relate, just dont like it,..... |
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