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Dark Terror of the Night(Please Comment)
written by XsouredXfaithX06:45 AM 3/4/05its a day as normal as any other
then there walks a little girl with her older brother
they are going to their grandparents house
the little girl notices the sun being hidden by the clouds
she ignores and continues walking
getting some quality time in with her brother, doing a little talking
they suddenly stop in horror as they stare
their grandparents house in flames, it being no longer there
they rush to the police and asked what went wrong
"an electricle problem, dont worry though,their deaths didnt take long"
the tears begin pouring from her eyes
the whole time shes at her brothers, she does nothing but cry
she wakes up the next day as her brother is gone
the girl figured he went to go tell their mom
but she notices his wife,son and daughter arent there either
she starts to panic then stops to take a breather
she soon gets a call from the police of a car accident
and that her brother and his family died in it
the tears,as if on cue,broke out of her
so she relunctantly went to stay with her dad,sister and mother
they wasted no time putting her to good use
cleaning,working, and beat her when she tried to refuse
a few days passed and something terrible happened yet again
her parents commited suicide, sayin the she had killed them from within
in just a few days all she had left in this world was her sister
but she soon abandoned her,not thinking she would miss her.
all alone she went and screamed in the middle of the street
and fell to the ground and began to weep
she then heard a voice speaking in her head
blaming her for the reason her entire family was dead
the world begun to start spinning around this little girl
she began to feel nauseated, as if she was goiing to hurl
a man was taunting with her, playing with her emotions as if it was a game
he was winning, making her think she was all to blame
the flashbacks of the last couple weeks flowed through her mind
one death at a time
it was as if the man enjoyed taunting her with such pain
he had no heart, he felt no shame
you would think he was going to kill her or so it seemed
but this little girl woke up and realized it was a dream
she was covered in sweat and eyes full of tears
she checked her familys room to see if her loved ones were near
after seeing them all ok, she silently sat there and started to weep
but dried her eyes and went back to sleep
little did she know another nightmare wound haunt her mind
but this one would be different this time. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
this was a dream i had and what followed when i woke up covered in sweat and eyes filled with tears...there was a lot more to it and it spanned out over 3 and half to 4 hours...i may be writing another poem based on one of my dreams but not said at the end it was a dream like i did in this one but i would really like to know what you think of this so ill know what i need to improve on next time i decide to try this out.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Segan_libra66 (3-4-2005 - 06:33 PM)
| I liked the poem! I think its great that you are writing about what you have dreamed I do. That to but only in my journal at home! |
by XpaperdollX (3-5-2005 - 04:03 AM)
| Hey listen your a kick ass person and so fun to talk to you. You are also an amazing writer I love your work. And this poem I can feel it comes from deep inside you and thats what makes it really really good. I love it keep up the great work. love ya |
by ekibyo_drakmord (3-5-2005 - 04:35 AM)
| how do you do it? i cant beleive low life like that poem is! and a dream, thats the worst part, i would hate for a dream to be that real or horrible, there is one thing im glad about, not trying to sound at all cruel, but im glad i havent ben through anything in my life, to be able to think of somthing like that, so realistic, so in order, and so horrible |
by hatedandused (3-5-2005 - 09:32 AM)
| Man, a dream like that would really freak me out because a lot of my dreams actually end up happening. |
by ShrtNSwt5989 (3-5-2005 - 09:33 PM)
| Thats a very scary dream.. if I ever lost my family I would kill myself... I would not be able to live on... your a really good writer so keep up the good work!!
~Kris |
by ShrtNSwt5989 (3-5-2005 - 09:33 PM)
| Thats a very scary dream.. if I ever lost my family I would kill myself... I would not be able to live on... your a really good writer so keep up the good work!!
~Kris |
by -_Andnothinelse_- (3-17-2005 - 05:42 AM)
| reading this made it hard to breathe.... i've had this dream ... not the same but all too similiar.... the man told me if i ever told anyone what had happened ... he would be back the very next night ... a year or two went by and i got to joking about it .... and he came back as promised ... and i'm certain ill be seeing him again soon now :( .... i pray if he visits me , he will stop haunting you. |
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