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Not quite right
written by Trapezium03:52 PM 7/22/04There's something i'm feeling that's not quite right,
I'm all alone next to people and out of sight,
They don't see me they look through my very soul,
They stare past me their gaze feeling cold,
My good emotions slowly evaporate,
I'm filled with disaster, chaos and hate.
I carry the world on my shoulders and collapse,
People that don't know i even exist and make me feel trapped,
My blood stains the walls in the sanctuary of my mind,
The blood reminds me of the people i've left behind,
I want to be loved, i'd love to be wanted,
All i get is the sorrowful thoughts and the feeling of being haunted.
I cry my crimson tears once more,
Half way down my face and they're not red anymore,
They slowly change to black and trickle down my face,
I listen to the thoughts i create call me a disgrace,
I listen to the emptiness of the people and carry their tears,
I always give it my all and manage to turn their thoughts into my fears.
I'm seeing a rainy day it's black at morn,
I see the bread revert back to corn,
I watch everything change to it's original state,
You must remember this, you always choose your fate,
The things that realise this are moving ahead faster,
They're covering their wounds with bandage and plaster.
As for me i'm left behind like i find myself most of the time,
I eat up the sun in the hope it will make me shine,
In the hope that people will recognise me and my giving,
So people will realise i'm not actually living,
To make sure i can relive me death whenever i please,
So i can make people happy again and bring them to their knees. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
This is how i'm feweling right now... read closely... read between the lines... reread it... do all this so you truly realise how i'm feeling... there's more then meets the eye... it's very deep... and if you read it more then once you will realise why i think this is such a good poem.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by SuperBob (7-23-2004 - 03:49 AM)
| i read it the first time through..think i got about half of the hidden emotion...but thought it was amazing...read it a second time..and i think i got it all..its a really powerful poem...at least for me it is..i can relate..or atleast the way i got it i can..your talent never ceases to amaze me! |
by bathed_in_sin (7-25-2004 - 06:04 PM)
| *sighs* i understand this as if i wrote it myself. your composition and language and structure here is well thought out and pure talent. |
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