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My poems....
written by .purity.01:26 AM 3/13/05I’m just gonna let this out
I apologize to those who disagree
I’ll have to write this anyway
For it’s been plaguing me
what I am about to write
despite my efforts otherwise
and thought I’ve tried with all my might,
my poetry still sounds like shite
I’ve written another poem
and my self-esteem is soaring
I’ve displayed my deepest feelings
but it's just undoubtedly plain boring
as I polish off the spelling
I sit back, quite content
until I come to re-read it
and realize my torment
now I would never think ill
of such an inventive creation
if I had not compared my lyrics to
nursery rhymes compilations
and now I’ve gone on long enough
just to let you know
I’m in the shit, I’m losing it
but it's all part of the show |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
Y'know what? That was damn fun.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by (guest) (3-13-2005 - 02:06 AM)
| I think that was a awesomly funked up poem !!! it rox. |
by .purity. (3-13-2005 - 02:13 AM)
| lol, thanks... and thanks for reading it.
there. you get two thanks. how lucky are you man?! |
by (guest) (3-13-2005 - 02:17 AM)
| hmm was that a real poem? i think it was a joke. but if you were being serious then you NEED me to tell you that it sucked. well, it blows and sucks. probably like you do. anyways whoever said they liked it have no taste at all. you both should never even think about poetry ever again. |
by .purity. (3-13-2005 - 01:15 PM)
| so what if it does?
so what if i do?
concerned?
look sonny boy, i don't need your oppinion, i need advice, so just fund the therepy or justify the comment. simple. serious? do you really think i was being serious at all? and if i was, clearly i don't need you to state your oppinion that it sucks... lol, reading it, i thought you might realise that! you could at least leave your log-in name if you really think you mattered at all.
And, of course, you can't argue with someone else's oppinion, thier taste doesn't need bullshit expectations.
As for the sucking and the blowing- grow up, how old are you, nine?
oh, so that's why you couldn't register or read very well... figures.
Thank you for the oppertunity to kick your ass on so many levels.
In future, go on google search and type in 'Little Red Riding Hood Books' take it from there. |
by butcakes (3-29-2005 - 11:35 AM)
| top work. your doing well for a 13 yr old... im not judging you on that, i think its awesum!! keep it up...
and thanx for posting on my poems... its encouraging! theyre actually poems i wrote ages ago and my friend suggested i put them on this site... but im so encouraged to see people putting their stuff out there on a 2 way medium like this! so thank you. your an encouragement. can i have ur email adress? mine is butcakes@hotmail.com ...u dont have to add me or give me ur adress ;) and to those who are here to remain unnamed, grow some guts, you self-praising sluts. haha theres some quality poetry to critisize... though your just critisizing yourself if you do!! peace out. wrtie whats in your mind - its the only way for other people to see it! ROCKON!! |
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