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Put Them All On Me
written by brokenxsmile01:42 AM 3/13/05When your vision is blurred
And you cannot see
Take all your tears
And put them all on me
When the weight on your shoulders
Is keeping you from being free
Take all your problems
And put them all on me
When you have no one to turn to
And no one will listen to your plea
Take all your concerns
And put them all on me
When you're feeling low
And you aren't sure of who to be
Take all your doubts
And put them all on me
Because I truly love you and I need to
Be here with you forever
And I don't care what it takes
For you, I will do whatever |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by *esha* (3-13-2005 - 01:44 AM)
by Dianesjewels (3-15-2005 - 03:04 PM)
| This is pretty good, catchy. You need to work a bit on your rhythm & meter to make it flow better for your reader. |
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