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Colours of Death (Comments)
written by DarkeningBeauty02:38 PM 3/13/05Black fingernails dig into her wrists.
Crimson blood drops from the cut.
Her greying heart yearns for love.
She lies down, seeing white.
*This took me about 2 seconds, I think it sucks, so if you don't like it, tell the truth!" |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by xfadingmemoriesx (3-13-2005 - 02:40 PM)
| its good :) serious. i like it. |
by thornyrosebud (3-13-2005 - 03:24 PM)
| i like it its so out there but here at the same time, (no i am not on drugs)
Its really good, u should give urself more credit! |
by xwhatitis2burn8x (3-13-2005 - 05:24 PM)
| its good but needs more detail. you need to elaborate more and put some more feeling into it. its only problem is its too short. it needs a beggining and more context to the body. but keep at it youve got great potential |
by crimsonregret (3-13-2005 - 07:22 PM)
by dark_broken_angel (3-13-2005 - 08:38 PM)
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