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Blackout
written by burning_tears03:36 PM 3/15/05everytime i do something wrong
i tend to get really upset
and whan i realize what i did
its harder for me to deal with it.
so start to cry
it all goes black
i can't remember
i can't go back
but when i wake
i see the blade
and see what i have done
out of my blacked out rage
i can't be alone
i can't trust myself
but i need my space
i can't stand anyone else
so when i blackout
i know on thing for sure
i can't be saved
and theres no cure |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by xfadingmemoriesx (3-15-2005 - 03:42 PM)
| I love your poem, I can totally relate to it. I know how it feels when something like that happens, it's like you're just too angry over a certain thing that you don't know what you're doing. And when it's over, you start to regret, and think back, but there's nothing you can do to change it. |
by Dianesjewels (3-15-2005 - 03:44 PM)
| Could use a lot of fine-tuning; your content is alright, but you need to improve on quality, to make it more interesting for your audience. |
by deadheart4ever (3-15-2005 - 04:10 PM)
| Aren't you supposed to capitalize 'i' when it's by itself? O well, it was good! |
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