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--The Crimson Shade Of Misery--
written by DaMaGeD09:01 PM 3/15/05You grit your teeth, dont ever cry
Your anger pulses through the knife,
A silver ship sinking into the sea
The crimson shade of misery,
Waves of darkness pull you down
In this disgrace you slowly drown,
Nobody knows you hurt so much
Cos they only look and never touch,
They dont know that true pain
Is to cut, and cut again
Untill you bleed amost to death
And still feel nothing but emptyness. |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by held_captive_19 (3-15-2005 - 09:03 PM)
| this poem is good i like it, i understand what you mean....but its kinda depressing |
by Dianesjewels (3-15-2005 - 09:06 PM)
| I am less concerned with 'what' you write about, and more 'how' you write it and whether or not you convey meaning to your reader.
That said, you have several good lines in your poem; but overall, it could stand some improvement. It's ok. |
by doobz (3-15-2005 - 09:30 PM)
| well i luv this poem. true class. do not listen to dianesjewels. that random is up her own arse. i luved this poem. wirte some more cos ur gud gud gud..... |
by (guest) (3-15-2005 - 10:21 PM)
| ye..i don't agree with 'dianesjewels' at all-i think its a great poem- written in a very good way-it conveys the sadness n i can relate 2 it...x |
by mattslilvampgirl (3-16-2005 - 10:23 PM)
| Never Pay Attention To What ITs About, Just Let The Rhyms Hold You In That Place |
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