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just another march day
written by CLC_RockGirl03:31 PM 3/16/05Just a March day from the warm shining sun
To the cold dark clouds the weather changing.
Before my eyes I see the change take place.
It was a nice and calm day that shown bright,
But dark clouds came and covered the blue sky.
The sun disappearing from the heavens,
It letting darkness flow over the earth.
As the cold comes the flowers slowly die
And the creatures crawl back into there hole.
They all wait for when the sun will emerge |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Dianesjewels (3-16-2005 - 03:45 PM)
| Flowers are dying in March? They had bloomed already?
It seems more like a poem about winter to spring, but IF you want to talk about how 1 particular day changes (which is fine), then be sure it is clear to the reader and find better words to capture that sudden change of the day. |
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