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"no don't" (please comment)
written by demented_vampire08:09 PM 3/16/05Everytime I'm with you,
you make me want to cry.
All the love I had for you,
you made it go and die.
I know that I can do way better,
I just don't want to let you go.
But now your pushing me too far,
I'm telling you this so you know.
I don't understand why you are doing this to me,
or why you can't see that I care.
Can't you see the cut's I make,
or are you doing this because you know you will
never be there?
I'm going to miss us being together,
but I'm know im going to be happy.
I know this won't hurt you as much as it will me,
but maybe you will come back and beg for it to be.
Im telling you this now,
because if I don't I won't be able to keep going.
I don't know why I hide the pain and the tears,
maybe I should stop hiding them and let you know what I'm showing.
Maybe you will feel just alittle bit sorry,
or maybe you won't.
I know what you did,
when I'm leaving don't try to stop me by saying "NO
DON'T" |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
its just time for you to know what your
doing to me.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by xangelbumx (3-16-2005 - 08:10 PM)
| very well written, good job |
by (guest) (3-16-2005 - 08:27 PM)
| wow that was really how i feel about mi old bf when i was with him and now that we arnt together it is the hardest thing
omg i loved your poem and you should keep writting you could go far really far
WOW !!!!!
< you truely laney |
by Dianesjewels (3-16-2005 - 08:52 PM)
| You lose your meter; but for a simple poem, using simple words; it's well expressed. |
by (guest) (3-16-2005 - 09:11 PM)
| thats how i feel bout my bf i m gonna break up with him now |
by (guest) (3-16-2005 - 09:31 PM)
| well written! good job dude! that rocked! ur not the only who feels that way! so yeah! lol...
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by demented_vampire (3-17-2005 - 01:51 AM)
| Thanks, but it was hard to let him go,
but he had to know what he was doing to me.
i just couldnt take it anymore |
by Drmsr_XXIII (3-17-2005 - 04:08 PM)
by (guest) (3-21-2005 - 08:59 PM)
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