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LITTLE GIRL(PLZ COMMENT)
written by Ev0l_sin#TRIP10:23 PM 3/21/05LIFE ENDS WHEN YOU WALK AWAY
DEATH CUTS DEEPER EVERY DAY
FOR THE LOVE I GAVE, WILL U REPAY
WHAT YOU HAVE STOLEN
WITH MY HEART YOU'VE PLAYED
SHE'S WALKING NOW
DO YOU EVEN CARE
SHE'S GOT YOUR EYES AND YOUR COLD STARE
YOU GAVE HER THAT LOOK WHEN YOU LEFT
I TRY MY HARDEST TO LOVE HER BEST
IT BRINGS TEARS TO MY EYES
HOW GORGEUS SHE IS
NO BLACKENED SKIES
NO PAINS TRUE KISS
SHE KNOWS NO FEAR
SHE KNOWS NO BLAME
SHE LOVES EVERY THING
SEES IT ALL AS A GAME
IT KILLS ME HOW U DON'T CARE
HOW U DON'T LOVE HER AS MUCH AS ME
BUT THATS THE WAY ITS ALWAYS BEEN
AND THATS HOW IT WILL BE
HER BIRTHDAY IS NEXT WEEK
YOU SHOULD COME AROUND SOME TIME
JUST AS LONG AS U REMEMBER
THAT BEAUTIFUL LITTLE GIRL IS MINE |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by not_alive_nor_dead (3-21-2005 - 10:34 PM)
| i like it... it isn't the greatest poems ever... it don't flow as good as it could but the flow is goood enuf for the poem to be one of my top ten poems on this site... WAY TO GO!!! |
by forgotten.shadow (3-21-2005 - 10:50 PM)
| its ok but the rhyming skeme changed all the way through! try keeping the same rhyming pattern! |
by (guest) (3-21-2005 - 11:29 PM)
| this poem is quite touching i liked very much very awsome> |
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