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~BlEeDiNg DrEeMz~(leave comments, plz@!)
written by Ro$eBLudTeArs66606:31 PM 3/29/05there once was a little bird
hoo couldnt saya word
one day theres a pack
and its name was jack
and he fell down the stairs of the world. |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by doll_eyes (3-29-2005 - 06:34 PM)
| a pack?
idk i like the last line a lot, if you could build around it to make more sense, that line is beautiful lol |
by cg05punk (3-29-2005 - 06:39 PM)
by teejavus (3-31-2005 - 10:08 AM)
| now what is up there i thot no one could write worst limericks than me but u proved me wrong , try writin things that may have some relations |
by sum41luva (4-10-2005 - 10:28 PM)
| i like the first 2 lines but by pack do you mean back pack? the last line is okay but it in the poem doesnt make sense. |
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