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**--A--BREAK--THROUGH--**
written by blurredvisions09:02 PM 3/29/05i am watching the moon lit sky,
and the falling of raindrops
i think and think and wonder why,
the shouting never stops
Remembering the words exchanged...
progressing into a fight
i think ive got a plan arranged,
as i sneak into the night
its dark and silent, theres no noise
'spare the movement of my feet,
remembering my childhood joys;
i couldn't accept defeat;
but im a changed person today,
and theres no turning back time,
You broke me in a painful way
raping me has still left grime.
No matter how i scrub, it stays,
A permanent reminder
Of you and your discusting ways
I can't put this much kinder.
i don't believe in destiny,
I don't believe in fate,
I can't believe you messed with me,
And it IS YOU who i hate
So this is why I am going
I cannot stay with you,
And as soon as ITS done growing
I'll be leaving Mommy too. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
PLEASE PLEASE PLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEAAASSSSSEEE leave a comment!! i was told by a close and super honest friend that the ending doesn't make sense. i don't think it does either, but im just not sure how to CONVEY my point. ummmm... talk to me if you've got any ideas, cause the ending sucks. RACHEL said so. LMAO.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by _acceptable_loss_ (3-29-2005 - 09:12 PM)
| I agree with your friend the end is a little bit confusing but the rest of it is pretty good . . . .nice job |
by PreciousIllusion (3-29-2005 - 09:18 PM)
| I really like your poem. I think it makes since but you have to look at it a second time or so to grasp it. but other than that i like it! |
by (guest) (3-29-2005 - 10:06 PM)
| i reli liked it-2nd from last line is a bit confusing but it's reali gud x |
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