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No one cares
written by mansonlover9109:48 PM 3/30/05I feel lost
I feel empty inside
It's like no one wants me
It's like no one loves me
So why am I still here?
Why am I still alive?
If no one cares about me...
Then no one would care if they never saw me again
I see my mother running
She is running to me
She is trying to stop me but its to late
I thought no one cared
So now I know someone does
But if they really cared
Then why didn't they tell me
Maybe they didnt know
That I would end up dead |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by not_alive_nor_dead (3-30-2005 - 10:34 PM)
| it flows perfectly except for a couple of lines.... you know where you wrote im killing myself with a knife i think you really shoulldn't say that.. it doesn't match with everything.. try rewording it and maybe you should just reword the last line to.. other than that amazing. i love this poem.. don't stop |
by (guest) (4-1-2005 - 02:14 AM)
| I really loved it I have felt that way for a long time. Thank you! Because that poem gives me hope that there realy is a world out there. |
by Manson_Lover15 (4-2-2005 - 06:35 PM)
| I really like your poem, it sounded so good and I can relate to it, I have felt that way many times. -keep writting. |
by Manson_Lover15 (4-2-2005 - 06:36 PM)
| I really like your poem, it sounded so good and I can relate to it, I have felt that way many times. -keep writting. |
by poetic_tragity_x (4-4-2005 - 02:17 PM)
| ha!
complain complain...
uuuh whatever...obiously, your mom DOES care so shut the fuck up...
:-00000 |
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