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SUICIDE (PLEASE COMMENT)
written by bichickwholuvs2lick01:07 AM 3/31/05girl:" NO!! DON'T LEAVE DAMMIT!! "
boy: "WHY THE HELL SHOULD I STAY?!"
girl: "BECAUSE...............I don't know. "
(she bows her head and shuts her eyes.)
boy: (he stares at her and his hard features soften.) "Baby, if I stay here, things between us will never be the same again. " (he placed a finger under her chin and lifted her face up. he kissed her lips softly and then turned to leave.)
girl: (she stood in silence as the door closed and he walked out, leaving her alone. she collapsed to the floor and began to cry.) " How am I to survive this? Please God, do tell me. "
(she stood and walked to the bathroom. she opened the medicine cabinet and pulled out the bottle of sleeping pills. She went to fill the tub and as the water filled, she went to the kitchen to grab a bottle of vodka and a steak knife. She went back to the bathroom and undressed, tossing the pill bottle and steak knife onto the pile of clothes. She held onto the bottle of vodka as she stepped into the water.)
( she at in the tub for a few minutes taking long sips of the vodka when she finally reached for the bottle of sleeping pills. She opened the bottle and poured seven 35mg pills into her palm. She popped them into her mouth one by one before reaching for the steak knife. She dropped the open bottle of pills into the tub, pills scattering and dissolving into the water. she swiftly ran the blade against her flesh, but she made sure the cut was made deep enough the first time around.)
(she finished off the rest of the vodka and tossed the bottle across the room, leaving shattered glass everywhere on the floor. she lay in the tub, bleeding and losing conciousness.)
ONE DAY LATER..................
boy: "BABY, I'M BACK!" (he set his bag down in the doorway and walked to the bedroom.) " Baby? HEY BABY, WHERE YOU AT? " (he laughed nervously. the house was silent and seemed dead and sad. he walked to the bathroom and opened the door to a grim discovery. there in the tub sat his girlfriend emersed in bloody water. her skin was blue and wet. from the neck up, she was completely dry, her arms were dry as well. but there on her arm, from the wrist up to the elbow was covered in dry blood.) "Baby? " (he asked with barely a whisper.)
AN HOUR LATER.........
(the house was swarming with police and forensics. the boy was being questioned by detectives on who, what, when, where, why, and how. the boy was a wreck and his face was stained with tears. a cop drove him to his friend's place.)
cop: "We'll be in touch." (he left the boy and got in his car and left.)
boy: " I don't know what happened man. I left for one day and I go back to find her ......." (he bowed his head and sighed.)
friend: "Dude, I'm sorry to hear about your girl. When's the funeral? "
boy: " I don't know. Her parents are being contacted and I doubt they will even want me there. "
friend: " I'm sorry man. "
TWO HOURS LATER........
boy: (he sat alone in his friend's apartment. his friend had gone to a party and would not be back until later that night. he sat in the guest bedroom gripping a .09mm thinking about his now dead girlfriend.) " Baby, why did you do it? I was gonna come back. " (before he placed the barrel of the gun in his mouth he said) " God forgive me..." (he placed the barrel in his mouth and pulled the trigger.)
FOUR DAYS LATER.........
(they were buried next to one another beneath an oak tree. their family and friends grieved naturally. but there on the tombstones read : TWO LOVERS TWO UNHAPPY ENDINGS FOREVER TOGETHER. )
THE END |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
I dont know why I wrote this. I guess I have had time to think and I enjoy writing...so leave a comment and let me know what you think.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by xOneMorbidAngelx (3-31-2005 - 03:26 AM)
| that's really good...i envy your ability |
by I_Heart_Travis (4-1-2005 - 03:46 AM)
| its really good, kinda deep, i liked it.. |
by dark (4-1-2005 - 08:09 AM)
| OMG that is like the sweetest sadest thing i have ever heard did u make that up??????? |
by forevrfalen4 (4-1-2005 - 08:30 AM)
by (guest) (4-2-2005 - 08:23 AM)
| this actually made me cry thinking this does actually happen to people it was very very good |
by punk_chick025 (4-3-2005 - 09:52 AM)
| omg this is one good poem...it was really sadd and depressing..good job |
by poetic_tragity_x (4-4-2005 - 02:22 PM)
| omg thats soooo sad!!!!!!!!!! uuuuuuuuuaarhg!!!
nfjisfnsn
i wanna cry! :['( you should be a "dramatic story writer.." yeah
:['(....
wow.
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by xXxBlOoDyMexXx (4-5-2005 - 10:15 PM)
| *tear* Man dis is sum deep shit *tear* Your great at stories |
by (guest) (4-6-2005 - 04:14 PM)
| i really like this, i was thinkin of doin it myself but i chickend out, i now know how to kil myself mate, tar! xx lol |
by good*angel*slapper*1101 (4-7-2005 - 09:57 PM)
| that was deep i loved it u should be pro |
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