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6 billion/10000/800/1 (comments?)
written by Starry_Nyght11:56 AM 4/8/056 billion people on the earth
10 000 students on turf
800 pupils in the lecture
You were the only one who caught my attention
How did you blind me?
My mind isn't clear
On how you made all my
Bad mem'ries disappear
10 000 student
300 in class
But I only got eyes
for that sexy (well, you know!)
But what I love most
Is that beautiful heart
That's why it is killing me
When we are apart. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
Its about David, at QUT. I really like him. *sigh*
Anyone like?
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| » Comments / Feedback | by boxboy (4-8-2005 - 12:03 PM)
| lol I like it =) it's very creative, but doesnt seem alll that serious in the third verse. haha it kina ruined it. |
by xfadingmemoriesx (4-8-2005 - 12:06 PM)
| Mmhmm. I agree with boxboy, the third verse ruined the poem. But overall, it was an okay poem. You could do better though! :) |
by DemonWitch (4-8-2005 - 12:17 PM)
| I liked it and im not so sure about it being messed up but i like it. |
by (guest) (4-8-2005 - 01:04 PM)
| i like it.. :-D but instead of putting "well u no" i was thinking u were gonna put ass but nvm ... :) but i do like it though.... |
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