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Secrets (Comments are Welcome)
written by True_Darkness07:31 PM 4/14/05Mouth Held,
Wide Shut,
Keeping Secrets,
You Haven't Got,
Let it Slip,
You know you want to,
There it goes,
No One Will Mourn You,
You cant run,
And you cant hide,
Get a Grip,
Cause here comes the tide. |
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Bad i know and amateurish but.......
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| » Comments / Feedback | by *xoxo_Heiress* (4-14-2005 - 07:44 PM)
| I love the ending. I caught the rythme of the poem, and I think the last line of the first stanza would be better as "You haven't got." It'd flow better like that. Other than that, it's such beautiful poetry. You should be proud. Kudos to you!
Kiss kiss,
~*~Alexis~*~ |
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