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My death poem (comment please!!)
written by --comfortably_numb--04:45 AM 4/15/05why, why, why?
why do you stop me now,
when you know that me just cutting,
deeper and deeper,
will end everyone’s miseries,
you can help me, even encourage me,
just let me end my life right now!
you have screwed me up, truly fucked me up,
I hate you now, devastated at what you dare to do...
so let me die, just let me stab that knife, let me destroy,
the life that I had,
but not any more...
just let me end it!
I live no more,
except for off your love,
u believed in me, just a little bit too much!
so let me end this,
coz the more I cry...
the more I want to die...
I hate my life, and you should hate it too,
coz it is a disgrace,
I cant live with myself,
just want to die,
out of my own irritation.
I don’t believe,
I will just stab deeper and deeper,
just let me die, to day, right now!
I don’t know what to say no more,
I dun speak during the day,
I just cry inside,
and think of us,
before I died away,
I hate my life,
just let it end,
will you help me?,
coz I need some pain,
slit my wrists,
or punch me hard,
kill me now,
and hurt me bad,
let me feel the pain, before I hurt myself,
not physically..
but instead by ripping open my heart, and to do that, I must kill myself,
and separate us... |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
this was my first real poem, and I wrote it at 12 years old. most ppl say it's good but I don't really like it.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by perfect.flaws (4-15-2005 - 04:59 AM)
| hmm lots of emotion, but you write "will you help me?"... but if you were to kill yourself, and you would seem to want to kill yourself, then why do you ask for help? am i missing something? |
by --comfortably_numb-- (4-15-2005 - 05:11 AM)
| hmm.. you've got a point perfect.flaws, but as I noted this was my first proper poem, and once it's saved the only thing changed is spelling mistakes... thanks for the comment |
by perfect.flaws (4-15-2005 - 05:30 AM)
| Okay..I wasn't sure if I had missed something.. so well done^-^ |
by (guest) (4-15-2005 - 01:20 PM)
| i liked it. -AthiestAnarchist |
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