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» Poem: The night sky (please read!! n' comment!
The night sky (please read!! n' comment!
written by --comfortably_numb--
11:08 AM 4/17/05
The stars at night are my light,
I see them and stare,
I sit in my bed and cry and the stars are watching,
I know they can see me and everyone else,
They sit and they search for the one that needs help,
Tonight it is me and tomorrow maybe you,
The stars tonight are the ones that I need,
They shine above me and you both at once,
I love there brightness and the absense of there sadness,
They stare at me tonight,
For im the one that needs them,
They just shine there for me,
For they shine brightest for me,
They shine above me and all my depression,
As I cry In my bed I watch them and watch my self,
I see my reflection in their brightness,
I watch your reflection as you lay there asleep,
So peacefully and so sweet,
And I question my self of why I never do that,
And why I always cry instead of be peaceful inside,
I never dream but instead I cry,
I never smile but instead I cry,
At night I cry outside,
And during the day I cry inside,
But im always crying,
So I end my life here,
With the stars shining brightest for the longest in years,
I end life here it’s the end of the line,
Im gone away,
Ive become a star,
And I tell all the others,
The next night Is yours..
Because im gone and your sad and not understood,
I guide the stars towards you,
Will you die like I did?


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» Comments / Feedback
by .Ebony.Rose. (4-17-2005 - 11:13 AM)
Brilliant deep poem. can i offer a lil advice. u use the same words over for a strong effect, and it works, but read it back to urself and some words are repeated, loosing the effect of the others. just friendly advice.... good poem tho!!!

by Killmequick (4-17-2005 - 11:14 AM)
This is some deep stuff, and it's totally cool. Go you! x

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