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The hell called heaven
written by devil-dick11:25 AM 8/10/04the gates to heavan was closed,
the guards were fast asleep.
i see the floor open up,
then i began to weep.
forever falling down,
hell is drawing near.
i see the flames, the scorching heat,
this is the true meaning of haunting fear. |
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who eva gives a good name, i shall use it.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Trapezium (8-10-2004 - 12:06 PM)
| Name:"The hell called heaven"
You got a nice poem here... a couple of spelling mistakes but nothing even slightly major... keep it up |
by (anonymous) (8-10-2004 - 02:59 PM)
| short but sweet, tis great, ellie x |
by (anonymous) (8-10-2004 - 04:09 PM)
by (anonymous) (8-10-2004 - 08:27 PM)
| thats goood. i like short ones... they are more to the point =) |
by (anonymous) (8-12-2004 - 02:54 PM)
| weehoo this one remnds me of my self lol |
by fuzzypunkhat (10-12-2004 - 12:03 AM)
| That's realllyyy good, the spelling errors aren't even a problem, for how good the poem is it covers up your mistakes. Very good job! :) |
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