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my life
written by DontFearAConcequence06:21 PM 8/30/04when i think about my life
i feel like i wanna take a knife
and just slit my own throat
or go under water until to the top i float
my life is over ruled my emotion
my life is filled with loads of commotion
the tears are running down my face
i want to run, leave without a trace
all this hate, i keep it bottled up inside
its like im running in circles trying to hide
my life has become a huge mess
i feel like i need to come out and confess
that suicide has crossed my mind many times
to keep from resulting in that i write these rhymes
i know if i dies id make some people sad
i just want to tell of these feelings ive had
they take over my mind and leave me to suffer alone
i might be able to turn things around on my own
i see my own reflection and get filled with hate
i guess for me its all fate
i dont understand these things that i say
maybe come other day |
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this is one of my first poems..before the deep depression..
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| » Comments / Feedback | by forgottenfire (8-30-2004 - 06:28 PM)
| whoa, BEFORE the deep depression? It sounds like it's pretty deep already. I've noticed that being depressed makes people write better. I like yours a lot. It rhymes, I can never get mines to sound good. I always think of really stupid things to rhyme. Like stop then top.. Yeah. But you did a good job! |
by (anonymous) (8-30-2004 - 08:47 PM)
| i really think this poem would be a really good poem only if at the beginign it said about the rest then it would match my hole life an deverything that i ahve been through well yeha thanks lilone30469 @yahoo.com |
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