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Red Tommy
written by sarah1008711:03 PM 12/15/04Playing my guitar in the middle of the street, along comes a policeman and he says that he will beat me
If i do not put all my things away,
He's telling me its a section 8
1 boys says its harsh and that pig he turns around
Says he'll beat him dead if he makes another sound
He tells the ppl that they have to go away
It is illegal for them to hear me play
So i ask my mammy what is wrong with the police man,
and she says hes only doing the very best that he can
I sed we'd better if we kill them all dead,
After we kill them we can kill the president
After we kill him we can kill the ones that work for him too,
make sure they're all dead so they cant kill me and you.
Mother, im sure you've heard the cheif of police is dead,
some crazy bastard went put a bullet in his head
Now i am in prison, ive been charged with the crime
I must insist
that i did asist, the man it was Tommy Ryan
Tommy Ryan's a good man, he's fighting for you and me
So that one day my brothers and sisters all will be free
And on that fateful night when i screamed go Tommy go.
He ran into the night, to where nobody knows.
The police they beat me and called me a snivelling swine
But no matter how hard they hit me, i never mentioned Tommy Ryan
So i'm playing my guitar in the middle of the street
Along comes that police man and he says that he will beat me
If i do not put all my things away
He's tellign me its a section 8
But this time that pig will get a big suprise
When he looks into thoses ppls eyes
They tell them that they are going to stay
And listen to me play until their dieing day. |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
Another figure. Lynch brothers.
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Evil_Babi_13 (12-15-2004 - 11:08 PM)
| You did great, we loved it |
by Trapezium (12-16-2004 - 05:26 PM)
| Could you at least use appropriate stanza spacing? Yeesh |
by sarah10087 (12-16-2004 - 08:09 PM)
| The stanzas are how i wanted them to be. The first and second ones are ment to be that to show they are similar, it juxtapositions the developement from the start to the end. God you know nothing about analysing poetry |
by Trapezium (12-16-2004 - 09:24 PM)
| You end the first stanza halfway through a sentence. To show they are similar? Can you tell me, exactly - what is similar about them? I know nothing about analysing poetry? I've been doing it for years, and every now and then I get payed for it. YOU know nothing about analysing poetry. |
by sarah10087 (12-16-2004 - 10:00 PM)
| The first stanza ends in enjambement (thats when one line flows to the next.) Poetry is not always gramatically correct ("the 6'o'clock noos" is a good example of this, spoken in scottish dialect) And the first and last stanzas are the same situation, with a different outcome. The people gain their independance to defy the bully. |
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