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I hope it isn't too late
written by Cut_Wrist_Risk03:53 AM 2/12/05I tried telling you before,
but I know you won't care anymore.
How I feel never mater at all,
by telling people my feelings, the harder I fall.
But I told you anyway, but you didn't listen well.
So now everyone needs to shutup, its time for show and tell.
Im telling you now I think of you everynight.
Not to mention morning, afternoon, when your not in sight.
I think of how happy i could be,
me with you, you with me.
I think of you differently then people have said,
it's not an obsession, for that I would dread.
I care about you so much, and Im frightened for the day when you'll know.
Will you stay close to me, or pull away and let go.
I need you more than you could ever think of.
I needed some one to care about and love.
But sadly enough, I know you wouldent condsider thinkin the same.
For this entire love thing is nothing but a game.
You like you love, you kiss you hate.
By the time you say sorry, its already too late.
I don't want to make that mistake,
thats what I had to say.
For show: this is my heart and it is broken.
Over come by broken promises and prayers unspoken.
A prayer for a beter tommorw, and a chance to be with you.
A hand is what I give, trembeling of rejection from you.
My eyes see through everything you are.
Knowing you're hurting inside, knowing life is hard.
You show me the girlfriend you now have.
How this hurts my heart, so damn bad.
But what happens happens we not know our fate.
So this is what i had to show and what I had to say.
I hope it isn't too late. |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by soimpossible1339 (2-12-2005 - 04:07 AM)
| Okay...so please don't think I'm trying to come off rude... this is constructive...
Don't let the rhyming control you. You don't need continuous couplets in a poem. If it doesn't rhyme? Then so be it. Do not let the need to rhyme control what you're writing. It could be so much more effective if you just let the words come out rather than look for the words that rhyme...
Try a different rhyme scheme maybe... or possibly a free verse...
also, proof read after you're finished... there are many grammatical and spelling mistakes that make the poem look less professional...
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by (guest) (2-12-2005 - 04:12 AM)
| I found ur poem to be awesome and that is how I feel bout someone I know |
by lilfukedupdragonlover (2-12-2005 - 04:13 AM)
| i like this poem and i hope the person no wat he is missin because u are very talented. i lost mi everything and its real hard to go on. i cant do it hardly.if u eva wantto talk u2u me. |
by jaggalosb*tch (2-12-2005 - 04:19 AM)
| i like that a lot it actually made me cry good job!
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by XsouredXfaithX (2-12-2005 - 04:38 AM)
| good job as usual cassy!! and dont worry about rhyming or errors when ur typing its bound to happen and i dont think that guy was trying to be rude...great poem keep on keeping on!!! and i dont think it matters if your 14..pain and love do not think about age, just the person |
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