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home/belong (please comment!)
written by darkness_follows_me05:27 PM 2/28/05this darkness over comes me
where it takes me home
back to where i should be
and back to where i belong
im not there,i must travel
fuck its cold
im tired and
hungry,what to do? carry on...where i go home,back to where i belong |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by portorockkitten (2-28-2005 - 06:16 PM)
| i think this poem has great potential....it started out good but i feal like the end was rushed.....maybe you should read it a few times and see if anything to add comes up in your mind (just a suggestion)...keep up the good work! |
by koolgurlhere (4-1-2005 - 04:54 PM)
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