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Broken *please comment*
written by mishy007707:58 AM 3/6/05Here I am, on broken wings
Trying to fix these broken things
Trying to heal my broken smile
The glue only lasts for a little while
Then it all falls apart over again
What will mend all of this pain?
Look at the sky, it keeps falling apart
Look at the floor; my shattered heart
Look beside you, she's waking up
Let her drink from the poison cup
Then no more she will bother you
Then soon there will be nothing to do
It's all broken, and it's tearing me down
My heart is shattered, so I can only frown
I see skies with cracks, creeping through
I see broken children, what can I do? |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
I'm not sure what its about, I just chose a title that appealed to me, and wrote off it. so yeah, PLEASE COMMENT. I might do that more often
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Music&Romance (3-6-2005 - 08:23 AM)
| awesome poem. i've used the glue analogy in my poetry too...glue only holds for so long... |
by darkness_follows_me (3-6-2005 - 01:37 PM)
| brilliant,i loved it,well done,keep up gd work
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by (guest) (3-6-2005 - 04:16 PM)
| Nice...Glue...heh...very nice |
by (guest) (3-6-2005 - 07:12 PM)
| that was a REALLY good poem! it's sad though, maybe next time u'll make a happy 1 |
by floggingfelix (3-6-2005 - 09:15 PM)
| i wrote a poem called Broken too. urs is so much better then mine is. :) |
by GuItArBrO18 (3-7-2005 - 09:10 AM)
| Damn... deep, scray kinda, but very good. Keep up the good work
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by brokenxsmile (3-7-2005 - 07:19 PM)
by darkmatt (3-7-2005 - 10:00 PM)
by blackness667 (3-8-2005 - 03:01 AM)
| really good ,Very expressive, and thought was acually put into it . |
by greenstarbursts66 (3-8-2005 - 07:02 AM)
| That is a really cool poem... a lot of people say that some of my writing is scary and i don't know what to think of it but i don't think your writing is scary i think it is honest. well written! |
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