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Unkown Wonders
written by blackened_rose09:42 PM 3/15/05Talking to you here
Hearing your voice again
Knowing what you fear
But making you alive agian
Wishing I was there
But a thousand miles away
Your picture I do stare
Almost every single day
Hoping against hope
Looking past my fears
This emptiness I cnt cope,
But that's why I linger here
Feeling emptiness fades
Just listening to your voice
Remebering in the past I've been played
Being hurt against my choice
But your different from them
Excepting who I am
Waiting till teh day
When I can hold your beloved hand
Feelings of being excepted
Joy of being loved
Hoping this'll never end
These things sent from above
... Or seem to be... |
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| » Comments / Feedback | by blurredvisions (3-15-2005 - 09:48 PM)
| um wrok on hte sepelling. just kidding. but you do have some errors. im anal about that sorta stuff (sorry). i liked it. the only other thing that i didn't so much like was the second to last stanza... am and hand do not rhyme. not that it matters, but it would sound even more terrific if you fixed or altered that. good job. (its a whole lot better than any of mine) |
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