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gone with the season (please comment)
written by not_alive_nor_dead08:55 PM 3/20/05the days were short
the wind was cold
frost bite had ahold of my face
i was stiff
but that didn't matter
for you were by my side
we were together
everyday and any hour
but as the days got longer
the wind was warmer
my frost bite was dying
i was free
it all made me cry
for i had left you
it's not your fault
it is all mine
our love has gone
just like the season
ime all alone
and too young
spring is here
winter is gone
you're new with a new love
she's rubbing it in
my last words
may be of hate
but to you
for our love is gone with the season |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
this is a different style of poetry for me... don't be mad if u don't like it.. it was for a school project but i meant something for me so i put it on here.. hope you enjoy it :)
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| » Comments / Feedback | by Whisperthewind (3-20-2005 - 08:57 PM)
by (guest) (3-20-2005 - 09:57 PM)
| it is pretty good but it does not flow if u know what i mean you need to work on like maching up the words a little better but it is good if you have just started to write you will be resly good in a few years |
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