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Loving You *plz comment*
written by mishy007701:47 PM 3/27/05Floating on air, because you're with me
when you're near there's more i can see
I love you more then i thought i could
If I could change the world for you, I would
You make me the happiest I can ever be
You make it so clear that you also love me
When you hold me everything seems right
You're on my mind all day and all night
You make me feel like I am really cared for
I have never loved like this ever before
If I was to loose you, I'd surely loose it all
Who would be there to catch me when I fall? |
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Author's footnotes and comments on this Poem:
It's about Rory, I love him so much and he's the one that inspires these HAPPY poems :D He brought me out of the dark... He's my everything! PLEASE COMMENT???
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| » Comments / Feedback | by amba_bell (3-27-2005 - 01:49 PM)
| hey i liked that... i just lost my boyfriend of two years he meant the world to me.. im glad u have ur romeo hold onto him and cherish every moment u have it was great to read something like that.. it brought alot of great memories bak keep writing and im hapi that u r so hapi n complete :) amba |
by butcakes (3-27-2005 - 01:51 PM)
| thats awesum. really really portrays the feelings... i totally see where your coming from... love is awesum! god is love! my answer to the closing question is God. |
by BeautifulGurlie15 (3-27-2005 - 02:35 PM)
by a_girl_to_fetch13 (3-27-2005 - 02:44 PM)
| That was really good. I liked it alot. Only advice I would give is, not to use so many obvious rhymes. Could and would. Right and night. All and fall. In this case, they acctually fit very well, so it was really great, but it's |
by a_girl_to_fetch13 (3-27-2005 - 02:47 PM)
| nice not to get into that habit. Sorry about the split thingy there, I fuckered up. Great poem. Keep writing.
-Holly- |
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