» Poem: let me crave more |
let me crave more
written by GeishaGirl05:31 AM 4/21/05Some days I feel so frozen,
Other days the fear is there,
It’s so persistent it pains me.
Come with me on a journey,
that is my wearing years,
across the not so flat planes.
It’s not so picturesque,
I see shades of grey,
it’s dull, it’s boring,
the life is not there,
let me crave more.
Watch the beggar beg!
A pathetic plea for a life.
Give me something more,
I long for, I just don’t know,
things spinning in my head-
all these thoughts eccentric!
Little white bottles lined up-
like soldiers, What am I on?
Better I check? |
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» Comments / Feedback | by Genocide Reaper (4-21-2005 - 05:55 AM)
Its a good poem, made me think, though I stand by my opinion firmly. Its good. |
by InMyWake (4-21-2005 - 05:59 AM)
It was good....I think the 2nd stanza was best. |
by GeishaGirl (4-21-2005 - 06:02 AM)
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